SPACE PROGRAM: Blood Pressure

Hiya,

Slightly belated but, here are some notes I took from the Blood Pressure development with PACT centre for emerging artists. Thanks to everyone who came, gave feedback, acted with us and put up with sitting around a table talking about annoyingly specific uses of language.

These notes are from day 3:

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BP NOTES DAY THREE: New read and first crack at it.

- Stage directions. Pull some of that stuff out. No indication of frantic at the end.

- results/phonebill section

- comb through grapefruit and see if we can cut out some repeats

- duty bit, talking to much, mamma better like kane and keene

- michael holding adam moment. What is this moment. Sanja dislikes it.

- too detectivey

- fucking foyer???

- second eisteddfodd monologue, what is it's purpose for the audience. What does it do for them, what do they learn from it. HOW CAN YOU MAKE THIS CLEARER WITHOUT SACRIFICIING WHAT YOU LIKE ABOUT IT.

ADAM PROBABLY NEEDS A TIME TO TALK ABOUT HIMSELF IN A CONCEPTUAL WAY, CANT JUST BE MICHAEL. LAND OF THE ILL!!!!!!

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I also wrote this scene for an imaginary version of Blood Pressure wherein it was actually just the same as Ashes to Ashes by Harold Pinter.

Scene 4

Devlin: Den I shot him in the barf and he dead now

Rebbecca: Kiss my fist

Devlin: Nah

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So there’s another draft or two to do of this play I reckon but we’ve got time. Exactly until the 17th of July. When it opens. At the Old Fitz.

I hope you liked the photo of Jackson in his underwear.

love,

Mark

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